Excellent descriptive poem. I love how it changes focus half way through :)
The very last line needs some work though. Just a little jarring.
Editing pretty good but 'Bruce' is used as extra information both times - what do we do with extra information.
Also, the line with 'aw' in it is direct speech. How do we punctuate that?
Description very brief (and is not in italics). Why did it take a while?
βIt is amazing what you can accomplish if you do not care who gets the credit.β β Harry S. Truman